- Sep 9, 2020
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On reflection there are too many people called Harry in this story. I had to cut a whole chapter about Harry Winks finding himself on a 6 month well building project in Guatemala. I might swap Redknapp outside a pie and mash shop for David Ginola outside a hairdressers in the final edit.OK, first off I have to say that that's a great story and I enjoyed its plausibility very much - it was real to me and spoke to me as a reader.
But, I have to draw you up on one point and it's a minor one, I admit. Far be it from me to criticise you as an author or your 'process' as I believe you creative types refer to it as, but can I ask:
If Kane's been kidnapped by Russian gangsters, why have they let him out to go and eat pie and mash allowing Harry and Sandra to recapture him?
I know, I know, I'm being nitpicky. I'm just a reader, you're the author. There's no doubt a meaning behind it and I can't see it. Apologies.